#repetition

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First of all, I don't read sci-fi or futuristic plots, so this story already has marks against it (for me.) Secondly, repetition drives me nuts - and the very first page has "the ship" seven times. Thirdly, I don't care for the narration. It contains too much telling, not enough showing.