Seems a little too forced.

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I didn't really click with this excerpt. One issue was spoiling what happens in the intro before the book even started. I didn't really care for that. I also thought the names and some of the sayings were a little too "on the nose" for me. We've seen this kind of story many times so I guess I just wanted a little more imagination.