I gave this a read, and wasn't very impressed.
The writing felt stilted, with repetitive sentence structure. Even though it was just an excerpt, it was difficult to connect with any of the characters. They kept getting introduced superficially, but there wasn't really much to any of them.
In addition, the voyeuristic aspects of the story were awkward. I felt extremely uncomfortable reading them, and it was even worse knowing that it was a priest not only teaching Rasheed about sex, but encouraging him to watch and be watched.
At the end of the excerpt, I didn't feel any urgency to read more. The setting, characters, and plot weren't memorable in any way, and I would have liked to see more description and character development.