Awful

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The writing and dialogue was dreadful. I don't really know what else to say...it really was cringe-worthy, which is a shame because it's a premise that could be interesting - I love the idea of characters having minds of their own (any writer will feel this is true from time to time!), but the execution in this excerpt really disappointed me.