The first paragraph seemed like the start of any noir detective novel - a little stereotypical in the novels, but downright cheesy when it's presented as nonfiction. I was also really not a fan of the details of the imagined rape scene - telling the reader she was raped is enough; it felt gratuitous to be describing how the attacker would have felt, how the victim would have felt.
Overall, this first look reads like the author wanted to write a novel but ended up writing nonfiction instead. I think either an actual fictional novel or a more objective nonfiction story would be better; as it is, I have a hard time believing anything he says given the fictionalized settings and thoughts he portrays as real life.
Overall, this first look reads like the author wanted to write a novel but ended up writing nonfiction instead. I think either an actual fictional novel or a more objective nonfiction story would be better; as it is, I have a hard time believing anything he says given the fictionalized settings and thoughts he portrays as real life.