Seems Disjointed

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I know details have to be filled in, but what I read all seems to be a bit disjointed. I don’t mind flashbacks, but the part from the younger years seemed to ramble on instead of being taken care of quickly to get back to the main story that was started. The first part actually seemed to contain unrelated details which were confusing. Sorry, this one just doesn’t strike a good note with me.