The subject matter and characters were not to my taste.
I don't know anyone that would say, "Yoo hoo, is there a salesgirl out there...."
The dialogue was stilted and unreal. The author(s) should learn to write as though they are talking in an actual world.
I don't know anyone that would say, "Yoo hoo, is there a salesgirl out there...."
The dialogue was stilted and unreal. The author(s) should learn to write as though they are talking in an actual world.