Frankly, this excerpt was too short to tell if this book will be interesting or not. I think it was only seven pages. That's really not long enough to get any idea about the book. The subject matter is fairly standard (plain girl stays home, pretty girl goes to Hollywood) so the writing and the plot (or lack of same, if this is literary fiction) will make or break the book. I basically hated the first sentence : "I wore red capris on the plane". For a book that's supposed to be literary fiction - meaning the plot will be secondary and the writing/word choice/sentence structure will be paramount - this was not a good first sentence. In literary fiction - where a writer often spends years working on the first chapter - we need a better first sentence that draws us into the book. Just my opinion.