This potentially good story is badly in need of an editor to correct the many glaring grammar and usage errors, like "her and Matt had discussed" and "the pair of them as good as each other", that interrupt the flow of the story for this reader.
On the plus side, the characters introduced in these few chapters are interesting and their personalities and relationships seem realistic as they've been revealed so far. The disruption posed by Jess's arrival with her claim to be be Harry's daughter gives the arc of the story a great boost, so that the reader looks forward eagerly to learning about both the past (Harry's presumed infidelity) and the future (Matt and Kate's possible family). I'd definitely be interested in reading the rest of the book, but hope that before publication it's subjected to a thorough copy-editing.
On the plus side, the characters introduced in these few chapters are interesting and their personalities and relationships seem realistic as they've been revealed so far. The disruption posed by Jess's arrival with her claim to be be Harry's daughter gives the arc of the story a great boost, so that the reader looks forward eagerly to learning about both the past (Harry's presumed infidelity) and the future (Matt and Kate's possible family). I'd definitely be interested in reading the rest of the book, but hope that before publication it's subjected to a thorough copy-editing.