short and choppy sentences

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I was interested in the story at first, and intrigued by the cover image, but as the sample progressed I became less and less interested in it. The biggest reason for that is that the writing is very choppy with short staccato sentences that don't always seem to have much to do with each other. It just feels like clumsy writing.