Fast paced and sets things up for a dramatic time ahead.
If I were editing this, I would slow it down. It is so wordy that this reader was exhausted by the time the sneak peek was over.
Overall impression is TMI in first few pages. Some could be in a prologue, some could be in a second chapter.
I do think that it has potential to be a wonderful book. Slowing it down would only increase the anticipation, the drama.
If I were editing this, I would slow it down. It is so wordy that this reader was exhausted by the time the sneak peek was over.
Overall impression is TMI in first few pages. Some could be in a prologue, some could be in a second chapter.
I do think that it has potential to be a wonderful book. Slowing it down would only increase the anticipation, the drama.