Cute, but hard to follow

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Feels like a cute rom-com type of book and the characters of Annie and Emmitt appealed to me. What didn't appeal to me were two things: first, the author's method of plunging into dialogue or action and then circling back with the exposition is a little tough given the abnormalities happening here ... a woman dumped before her wedding by a guy who's staying her friend but marrying someone else? A guy who's a dad to a teenager being raised by two other guys who aren't gay? The three men are bickering about who will take the girl to her father-daughter dance while the author is trying to explain who they all are, why and how they arrived in this girl's life and what happened to mom, and it's a little much to follow all at once. The second issue is the poor editing covering up holes and inconsistencies. We open up to Annie trying on a newly delivered wedding dress while wearing a "corset set" and silver Jimmy Choos after a 36-hour shift, but she hasn't gone into her bedroom where there's a sleeping man - which makes no sense to me, since I doubt she'd keep those things in the living room or that she wore them to work or that they were delivered with the dress. On page 7 the dress "almost slides past her waist" but on page 12 she was stuck in it and couldn't even pull it sideways or reach an eyehook. On page 26 Emmitt throws his ballcap over a lamp and walks down a hall to the kitchen, on page 34 in the kitchen he resists the urge to pull the ballcap lower on his head. These sorts of things have me doubling back and re-reading too often to enjoy the story itself, wondering what I'd missed, so I'd probably pass, but with some good editing I could be into it. Cover was generic and nondescript, communicates cutesy with nothing as to the story inside.