The first line of any story should drag you in with a hook, line and sinker. "Hid From Our Eyes" starts with a church piece, which did not really connect with me as the starting line had nothing to do with it, the rest of the excerpt didn't either, and I was left wondering if it was just there or if it would be explicated further in the future.
The line "He had parked his cruiser in the muddy verge of the county highway, a little way from the circus that was going on up the road" gives nothing away, no suspense (other than the question as to what he is doing there, but not really as one can infer due to the genre of the book being a mystery), and no development to work with. It gives nothing about a character away, no action, nothing particularly eye-catching.
The time gaps and skips were a bit irritating in that I did not know when to root for who as people also were skipped over and there was not really much going on to sufficiently excuse those skips.
The cover is pretty and I was a minute bit curious, but so far I hope that the story does delve into the mystery a bit sooner if this is edited, or perhaps it is more exciting if one is a pure mystery fan. I am just not very patient.
The line "He had parked his cruiser in the muddy verge of the county highway, a little way from the circus that was going on up the road" gives nothing away, no suspense (other than the question as to what he is doing there, but not really as one can infer due to the genre of the book being a mystery), and no development to work with. It gives nothing about a character away, no action, nothing particularly eye-catching.
The time gaps and skips were a bit irritating in that I did not know when to root for who as people also were skipped over and there was not really much going on to sufficiently excuse those skips.
The cover is pretty and I was a minute bit curious, but so far I hope that the story does delve into the mystery a bit sooner if this is edited, or perhaps it is more exciting if one is a pure mystery fan. I am just not very patient.