I enjoyed the writing style greatly. It's clean, crisp and easy to read. I like the flow of scene to scene and how the characters respond to their settings. It's very enjoyable and refreshing to read something with such finesse.
But there were some things that had me a little confused. In the beginning of the story, it's hard to figure out what's going on. Where is the central conflict? The airplane scene could have been a flashback and the action scene with Elias giving the cab driver the 100 dollars would have been the place to start, in media res. Also there's two instances where the characters say their ages. 10 and 7. I'm assuming that they are some kind of supernatural people and their birthdays were 10 and 7 years ago but it needs explanation because here I am thinking I'm reading about adults and lo and behold they say I'm 10. And I'm 7. Then Ophelia says she's 26. It's not consistent and needs more explanation.
The dialogue is super formal and stiff at times. It reads like they're existing in a modern setting but are from the ancient times with the stiff dialogue. It doesn't read naturally.
However, the story itself seems quite intriguing. The writing is absolutely wonderful. I think this author should probably try writing historical fantasy because her style is perfect for it.
But there were some things that had me a little confused. In the beginning of the story, it's hard to figure out what's going on. Where is the central conflict? The airplane scene could have been a flashback and the action scene with Elias giving the cab driver the 100 dollars would have been the place to start, in media res. Also there's two instances where the characters say their ages. 10 and 7. I'm assuming that they are some kind of supernatural people and their birthdays were 10 and 7 years ago but it needs explanation because here I am thinking I'm reading about adults and lo and behold they say I'm 10. And I'm 7. Then Ophelia says she's 26. It's not consistent and needs more explanation.
The dialogue is super formal and stiff at times. It reads like they're existing in a modern setting but are from the ancient times with the stiff dialogue. It doesn't read naturally.
However, the story itself seems quite intriguing. The writing is absolutely wonderful. I think this author should probably try writing historical fantasy because her style is perfect for it.