I was really drawn into this excerpt at first. I was having fun reading it, feeling the edges of the first character and slowly learning the world through what bits were given. I love the concept and I feel like it might be quite a fun book.
However, the second chapter caused my interest to diminish a bit. Another character was introduced and we weren't really given any time with them until the plot introduced. Not to mention there's a third character.
I never say this as I prefer third person, but: I feel this would be better in first person. It might have allowed for better connecting with the characters before the plot starts moving along.
I'll still keep an eye out of this one because it's a lot to judge a book off the first few pages.
However, the second chapter caused my interest to diminish a bit. Another character was introduced and we weren't really given any time with them until the plot introduced. Not to mention there's a third character.
I never say this as I prefer third person, but: I feel this would be better in first person. It might have allowed for better connecting with the characters before the plot starts moving along.
I'll still keep an eye out of this one because it's a lot to judge a book off the first few pages.