This story so far is an example of what not to do for "show, don't tell." The writing avoids detail and doesn't tell the story in a way that gets me involved in the characters. It feels as though, instead of giving details about how characters are feeling and guiding us through how the characters feel and what motivates them, it simply states that they are doing the thing. This also makes the writing feel choppy, sudden, and like it doesn't flow well. It really does remind me of a newer writer on Wattpad. This writer has potential, but isn't quite there yet. Not writing I really enjoy, but something that could be improved. There's potential.