Nothing about this First Impression works for me.
The story is told in omniscient style, meaning there is no division between narrating characters. We steadily flit in and out of each characters' thoughts throughout.
There is absolutely no emotion in the writing. It feels like a play-by-play recitation.
A whole lot of sex is going on in this opening piece, but it's oh so awkward to read.
I'm sorry, but I couldn't find anything even remotely appealing about any of it.
The story is told in omniscient style, meaning there is no division between narrating characters. We steadily flit in and out of each characters' thoughts throughout.
There is absolutely no emotion in the writing. It feels like a play-by-play recitation.
A whole lot of sex is going on in this opening piece, but it's oh so awkward to read.
I'm sorry, but I couldn't find anything even remotely appealing about any of it.