Tense!

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So far, this is a great opening to a suspenseful story! I'm already trying to figure out which character might be likable, and which one might be a total ass. We already know from the tease that someone dies, we just don't know who yet. We don't know why Colin's hands are fish-scented. We don't know anything except that he might be the underdog in this story, so I'm automatically rooting for him.

I'm also curious to see if Ceo and Grahame end up being the mean guys they come across as. And the AX! Who seriously buys an ax to take on a major hike?! This blip ends on such a suspenseful note, so I'm seriously hoping my boy Colin isn't the one who gets hacked into (maybe) two big pieces. Wonder why they call him Q?