This first except was too short to say something solid, but I'll try.
The story feels quite enigmatic, supported by the writing. This one, in my opinion, is the strength of the text. Time goes quickly, because there isn't too much to tell - or that's what the author considers - and gives us a superficial view of what's happening that hasn't any lost. I like the way of... abstract that it gives to the story - about the Death walking besides the main character and with her newborn baby. It makes it quite sensitive - and surrounds it with a halo of misterious. The woman is going to die? Or her strange baby that doesn't cry? Or it is just a feeling about the war? This four pages have a lot of feeling - I would like to know more about it.
The story feels quite enigmatic, supported by the writing. This one, in my opinion, is the strength of the text. Time goes quickly, because there isn't too much to tell - or that's what the author considers - and gives us a superficial view of what's happening that hasn't any lost. I like the way of... abstract that it gives to the story - about the Death walking besides the main character and with her newborn baby. It makes it quite sensitive - and surrounds it with a halo of misterious. The woman is going to die? Or her strange baby that doesn't cry? Or it is just a feeling about the war? This four pages have a lot of feeling - I would like to know more about it.