The story is good so far, it's got some mystery right off the bat and continues adding to the mystery, which keeps me curious for answers. Background is provided in various places throughout the story, and is done in relation to what's happening in the present time.
There are some awkward grammatical issues, where commas or periods or a semicolon should be used (either in place of existing punctuation, or just added to the sentence), which is bothering me.
Something I REALLY did not like was the fact that glamour was defined twice - with nearly the same definition - in the first chapter. No need to repeat.
Overall, I like how the story is progressing, and the way it is written. I think it needs some edits grammatically, but it's not so bad that I had to stop reading it. It's told in a very engaging manner despite this.
There are some awkward grammatical issues, where commas or periods or a semicolon should be used (either in place of existing punctuation, or just added to the sentence), which is bothering me.
Something I REALLY did not like was the fact that glamour was defined twice - with nearly the same definition - in the first chapter. No need to repeat.
Overall, I like how the story is progressing, and the way it is written. I think it needs some edits grammatically, but it's not so bad that I had to stop reading it. It's told in a very engaging manner despite this.