After a distracting typo in the middle of page 8 (typo is after the paragraph starting with "That in itself..."), I didn't notice anything physically wrong with this first chapter/first look.
However, The Blurb under the cover made it seem that there were three kids concieved by Donor 806; yet clearly in the first chapter, Katie has a photograph of her biological Father and Mother on their Wedding Day. Doesn't sound much like the blurb at all.
Aside from that clearly bizarre mislead and the strange two-word typo, I still am intregued about the story....
Though, I feel that the "immature mother, not present father" scenario is a little over done.
However, The Blurb under the cover made it seem that there were three kids concieved by Donor 806; yet clearly in the first chapter, Katie has a photograph of her biological Father and Mother on their Wedding Day. Doesn't sound much like the blurb at all.
Aside from that clearly bizarre mislead and the strange two-word typo, I still am intregued about the story....
Though, I feel that the "immature mother, not present father" scenario is a little over done.