I felt like the writing style immediately pulls the reader into this excerpt.
Avery and her family have just arrived at her grandmother’s house for the first time in about a decade. You can tell very quickly that there’s a reason her family hasn’t visited more over the years. Now Avery’s grandmother is very sick and the family has come to spend time with her. Avery will be enrolling in school in the area, so it’s not a short visit. Grandma seems grouchy at best and probably caustic. It also seems like a small town without many Black people which will likely add an extra layer of complication for Avery and her family.
Avery and her family have just arrived at her grandmother’s house for the first time in about a decade. You can tell very quickly that there’s a reason her family hasn’t visited more over the years. Now Avery’s grandmother is very sick and the family has come to spend time with her. Avery will be enrolling in school in the area, so it’s not a short visit. Grandma seems grouchy at best and probably caustic. It also seems like a small town without many Black people which will likely add an extra layer of complication for Avery and her family.