Well.... It's probably too late for a rewrite; but chapter 2 should be chapter 1, starting at paragraph 5: "Am I in a cult?" That sentence would draw the reader in. Once you get past the 1st chapter the story picks up.
Chapter 1 is all about describing Ava Simon's apartment, cloths and habits. So much detail--down to what silverware she even has-- that I didn't care anymore. I get why the reader needs this info, but it should have been in Chapter 2. Catch the reader in chapter 1, then lead them in the rest of the chapters.
The main character seem to be interesting, Ava seems very set in her ways, but has to deal with a variety of characters and their personalities, which seem to be 'followers' of any new fad that comes along. How she deals with this at work will be interesting.
I really like the title "The Very Nice Box". That is what initially drew me in.
Chapter 1 is all about describing Ava Simon's apartment, cloths and habits. So much detail--down to what silverware she even has-- that I didn't care anymore. I get why the reader needs this info, but it should have been in Chapter 2. Catch the reader in chapter 1, then lead them in the rest of the chapters.
The main character seem to be interesting, Ava seems very set in her ways, but has to deal with a variety of characters and their personalities, which seem to be 'followers' of any new fad that comes along. How she deals with this at work will be interesting.
I really like the title "The Very Nice Box". That is what initially drew me in.