Interesting, but Needs Another Edit

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Just starting with the prologue, I have many questions that are dying to be answered. Who is the girl? Who shouldn't she trust? All without getting into the meat of the plot. But, it's difficult to read, mainly due to formatting. I think this need another edit to break up paragraphs with multiple speakers. It makes it difficult to follow who is speaking.