Grating style of narration

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This isn't my favorite genre to begin with, but good grief, I would not keep reading this. The main character in the preview is demonstrated as a tough-as-nails woman who doesn't take any trouble from men, but the way the male author writes her really grates on me. He leans super hard into the ideas of Fierce Feminist and Men Are Dogs in a way that... doesn't feel authentic?

The short, choppy, incomplete sentences aren't a style that I enjoy. In spite of being first-person, the narration is really distant from the main character and her feelings, motivations, and reactions. I have no idea what the greater plot arc is related to this scene or what the main character wants, and I 100% don't care to find out.