I had a hard time reading through this, and felt very confused as I read. The writing style feels too technical, like reading a report rather than a story. There was also a ton of backstory attempted to be described, but it just left me more confused about what was going on and took away from what was happening. Also, whenever the different characters speak, they all have the same voice, which is the same as the writing, so I don’t feel like someone is actually speaking, and it makes each character the same instead of unique. This sounds like a very interesting story, but I don’t think I would be able to get through it.