Story Lacks Cohesion

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While the writing is engaging and I'm intrigued by the story, I'm not sure the format works well for me. The chapters are short, which is fine, but they alternate between present and random past events. Then, one of the chapters in the present timeline includes the narrator having flashbacks of yet another past event. Consequently, this First Impression feels disjointed. I wanted more of a foothold in the present. I'm hoping the story has more cohesion as it moves along.