Interesting start with a lot going on

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There’s so much going on in this intro! It was a bit confusing at first, but I think I got the hang of it by the end. This could be the start to a really interesting story! I did feel like some of the historical parts read too modern (the sultan thinking “what the hell”) and that threw me out of the story briefly, but overall this was a promising start.