Less than impressed

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The premise of this one intrigued me—and I love the cover—but these first two chapters were disappointing. Normally diving straight into action is a great idea, but this opening (with Csilla's almost-execution) just felt /too/ dramatic, and didn't really give me a lot of Csilla's character. Meanwhile, I got plenty of Kane's character, but I don't find him at all likeable; I can't see myself rooting for him. And the writing just wasn't that great, with overdramatic construction and syntax that I tend to associate with an immature writer—overall, it reminded me of the exact kind of fanfiction that I avoid at all costs. I won't be continuing this one.