Just couldn't read it
The premise sounded intriguing. However, he lost me in the first paragraph, which is 7 lines and only 2 sentences. But I kept reading thinking maybe it was just a stylistic approach to an opening paragraph. Nope. The excerpt is full of extremely complex sentences loaded with clauses and information. Some of them are borderline run-ons. Most have so many clauses and commas, the sentences are nearly impossible to read. If this is what literary fiction is now, I'm clearly not the target audience.