This seems like a fast-moving, twisty mystery with lots of potential for character building and exploration of different sets/locations as the story and series develops.
I think the first chapter would benefit from having a location added to the setting, alongside the establishment of "current day." I figured out it was England only after inferring using context clues.
I think the first chapter would benefit from having a location added to the setting, alongside the establishment of "current day." I figured out it was England only after inferring using context clues.