Be careful what you wish for

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I love the premise idea for the story as it meshes with my own belief just wishing for something accomplishes nothing good. The flow of the excerpt is passive and invokes the feeling of driving through an empty town. This may be a stylistic choice to enhance the feeling of the novel but with a short preview, it is hard to say how that works with the work as a whole.