I think that this could be a great story. It started with a hook I loved but the way the author writes is a turn off. I feel like the author is trying to put fancy words in there, but it doesn’t do anything for the story. Within the first page there was the sentence, “Yolanda deftly grabbed the stack of documents and pivoted toward the copy room.” Deftly? Why was the word pivoted used? That’s not a normal way of speaking and honestly it completely warded me off from wanting to read this.